[Fiction] Friday #141
February 6th, 2010Current Mood:
Pick a book of fiction you’d never read (e.g., if you read sci-fi, pick a romance). Open to a random page and read the last couple paragraphs of the page. DO NOT TURN THE PAGE. Now continue writing the story. Feel free to change the genre as you write.
“I gave the name Jenks at the podium, and the obsequious maitre d’ led me upstairs to a small private room with a fire…” in the hearth. I could feel the warmth as I walked into the darkened room. The scent of a man’s cologne suddenly hit my senses. It was sweet, yet very much a masculine scent. I could only imagine who was behind that smell.
Looking around, I could see the room was decorated in masculine furniture. A heavy, dark leather couch and a matching, massive leather chair faced the fireplace. Dark chocolate walls made the room look rich. The windows were adorned with heavy velvet curtains; keeping the beautiful sunshine that I had just come from seem as if it was non-existent. The soft lights in the room illuminated just enough light for my eyes to adjust to.
I called out, “Hello, is anyone here? It’s Cora. I came as soon as I got the note.” No answer.
As I approached the hearth, I was startled when I heard movement. Lying at its base was a large chocolate lab. It looked up at me, then lay its head down as if I held no interest for it. I continued towards the fireplace mantel to have a look at the pictures displayed there. The ornate frames held pictures of what looked to be family events. Not knowing who Jenks was, I did not recognize anyone in the pictures.
Suddenly, I heard a rustle directly behind me. I turned slowly around. I could not believe what I was seeing. I became flushed and nervous as the man before me spoke my name in the deepest, melodic voice, “Cora, thank you for coming….”




Leave me hanging, why don’t you? I can’t help thinking Jenks is a vampire and she’s the meal.
Here’s my entry for this week.
http://johnpender.net/2010/02/fiction-friday-141/
I like how you used this prompt. Great job building up the tension.
So sorry it’s taken me this long to pop over. Am a busy mum too. You successfully built the tension leaving the reader wanting more.a great sign I look forward to reading your future work.oh.and welcome to FF
oh – and thanks for popping over and comenting on my story – other visitors can see it at http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2010/02/through-angels-eyes.html